读后续写father27s best flowers.ppt

2018.9.29,Fathers best flowers,英语科考试说明,读后续写：提供一篇350词以内的语言材料，原文多是情节丰富的记叙文，偶有少量的议论文，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。,第二节：读后续写（满分25分） 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。注意：所续写短文的词数应为150左右；应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。How to choose the underlined key words in your writing?How to make full use of the given sentences and the plot?How to make the story coherent and logical?,My Dads Best Flowers,The title:,Whats the writing style of the passage?A. Narration 记叙文 B. Exposition 说明文 C. Argumentation 议论文,A story,when,where,who,what,how,why,Step 1. Read for basic information,Who:,Mom, Dad, sister and I,When:,When living in the first home,Where:,balcony,What:,carnations,Characters,Plots,Theme,?,Step 1. Read for basic information,Why/how:,I remember my first home was a small apartment on the second floor with a lovely and spacious balcony. When my mom was busy in the kitchen she let me stay on the balcony watching the kids playing in the street. On that balcony I played sometimes with my elder sister, Maria. She was seven years old and when my mom was absent she was like a mother to me. The balcony was a great hobby place for my father. After his work he used to grow carnations (康乃馨) in flower boxes. His carnations were red, pink and white, and everyone appreciated them for their beauty.,Para1. My father grew carnations on the balcony and everyone appreciated their beauty. Part1,the Balcony lovely and spacious Why ?,Mother let me stay on the balcony .watchingPlay with elder sister A great hobby place for father grow carnations,He took care of them with so much love and devotion. He dealt carefully with his flowers like a mother taking care of her baby. Many times I sat on the floor of the balcony for hours observing him and his lovely flowers with patience. He was always doing something on that balcony. He was watering them every day,cleaning the balcony floor, changing the potting soil and when the stems (茎) were thick, strong and high enough, he started his improvement operation like a doctor.My dad took a tiny knife and with his left hand he held the stem of the carnation and measured the height. Then he made a small mark on the stem with his finger.Afterwards he made a sharp cut with the knife, just enough to fit in a grain of barley (插穗的芽). Then he bandaged the stem with a small bandage. His job was then to water the plants and to take care of them. “No one should touch them”, he said to mom. Every day, when he came home from work he went straight to the balcony.Mom used to tell us: “Do not touch daddys flowers.” For us it was a fascinating experience to watch how the small stems were growing and making flowers. When the carnations had grown big enough, my dad enjoyed watching them every day. We the kids did too.,Para2-4. My father took care of the flowers with love and devotion and he didnt let others touch them. Part2,He took care of them with so much love and devotion. He dealt carefully with his flowers like a mother taking care of her baby. Many times I sat on the floor of the balcony for hours observing him and his lovely flowers with patience. He was always doing something on that balcony. He was watering them every day,cleaning the balcony floor, changing the potting soil and when the stems (茎) were thick, strong and high enough, he started his improvement operation like a doctor.,_the carnations (Paragraph2),dealing with,How do you know my father loved the flowers so much?,dealt carefully with like a mother :was watering, cleaning, changing,Writing tips: Describe sbs actions by using some proper verbs and adverbs to show his or her strong feelings and emotions.,My dad took a tiny knife and with his left hand he held the stem of the carnation and measured the height. Then he made a small mark on the stem with his finger. Afterwards he made a sharp cut with the knife, just enough to fit in a grain of barley (插穗的芽). Then he bandaged the stem with a small bandage. His job was then to water the plants and to take care of them. “No one should touch them”, he said to mom. Every day, when he came home from work he went straight to the balcony.,Why can the writer describe everything father did in details?,Sat for hours observing with patience,Interested-understand fathers love for -?,Copy/have a try,_ the carnations (Paragraph3),improvement operation on,How do you know my father loved the flowers so much?,Started improvement operations like a doctor:took, held and measuredmake small mark ,make a sharp cut ,fit in ,bandage,No one should touch them.,Writing tips: Describe sbs actions by using some proper verbs and adverbs to show his or her strong feelings and emotions.,Mom used to tell us: “Do not touch daddys flowers.” For us it was a fascinating experience to watch how the small stems were growing and making flowers. When the carnations had grown big enough, my dad enjoyed watching them every day. We the kids did too.,Mothers warning,A fascinating experience watching,_the carnations (Paragraph4),watching,Step 2. Read for plot development clues(情节发展线索),the balcony (Paragraph1),_the carnations (Paragraph2),_ the carnations (Paragraph3),_the carnations (Paragraph4),Part2:(2-4)How dad took care of the carnations,Mothers warning,Part 1:Main introduction,Fathers warning &,dealing with,watching,improvement operation on,carnations,The given story:,Two parts:Part1 (para1): My father grew carnations on the balcony and everyone appreciated their beauty.Part2 (para2,3,4): My father took care of the flowers with love and devotion and he didnt let others touch them.,Part3 ? Continuous writing,Step 3. Predict possible plot development,Part3( 5-6) What will happen?,Mother and father s warning -anxiety,1.One day, my elder sister, who loved dad very much, had a great idea.2.When my dad arrived, he went as usual, straight to the balcony and saw his flowers lying on the floor like dead animals.,What is Marias great idea about? (clue),What did she do with the lovely flowers on the balcony?,make a sharp cut,Why did she do so?,Because of her love for dad,What is moms reaction to her idea/action?,How did dad react to it?,His feelings/ words / actions,Turn back to the title “my dads best flowers”.,The changes about dads feelings,The given sentences:,logic,the title,the given story,the underlined words,the two given sentences,Tip4: Write logically according to your reading and the two given sentences,The underlined key words:balcony, mom, street, appreciate, flowers, lovely, made a sharp cut, fascinating,Tip3: The key words that respectively stand for the most important information, the main character and the main object should be chosen in your writing.,Step 4. Draft a continuation(起草续篇),Step 4. Draft a continuation(起草续篇),1.One day, my elder sister, who loved dad very much, had a great idea._ 2.When my dad arrived, he went as usual, straight to the balcony and saw his flowers lying on the floor like dead animals._,Marias great idea.- She said/suggested,2. What she did-make a sharp cut,3. mothers reactionspeechless / anxious/worried/shocked,His reaction: facial expression & action shocked/upset/angry / calm / burst into anger /silent/ without a word/roar/smile1.What dad said: 2.What dad did: 3. Marias explanation 4. result,Step 5. Check and polish your version(检查润色)学生习作,注意：1.人称 时态 直接引语 间接引语 句子结构 单句 从句 并列句的使用 2.词性要准确,