新课程高中英语写作教学2.ppt

如何提高学生的高中英语写作能力?,语言地道、规范,覆盖所有内容要点,主要内容：Step 1: 内容要点； 词汇和语法的数量和准确性； 上下文的连贯； 语言的得体性。,应用了较多的语法结构和词汇,覆盖所有内容要点,【各档次的给分范围和要求】,第五档(很好)；(25-30分) 1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 2. 覆盖所有内容要点。 3. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。 4. 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。 5. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。 6. 完全达到了预期的写作目的。,Step 2:了解给分标准,【各档次的给分范围和要求】,第四档(好)：(20-25分) 1. 完成了试题规定的任务。 2. 虽漏掉一、两个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。 3. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。 4. 语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。 5. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。 6. 达到了预期的写作目的。,【各档次的给分范围和要求】,第三档(适当)：(15-20分) 1. 基本完成了试题规定的任务。 2. 虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容。 3. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。 4. 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。 5. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。 6. 基本达到了预期的写作目的。,【各档次的给分范围和要求】,第二档(较差)：(10-15分) 1. 未恰当完成试题规定的任务。 2. 漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容。 3. 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。 4. 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解。 5. 较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。 6. 信息未能清楚地传达给读者。,【各档次的给分范围和要求】,第一档(差)：(1-10分) 1. 未完成试题规定的任务。 2. 明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未理解试题要求。 3. 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。 4. 较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解。 5. 缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯。 6. 信息未能传达给读者。,【各档次的给分范围和要求】,不给分：（0分） 1. 未能传达给读者任何信息。 2. 内容太少，无法评判。 3. 写的内容均与所要求内容无关或所写内容无法看清。 4. 抄袭试卷前文中的内容。,Step 3:体验当老师 ，为学生给分 §书面表达§（满分30分） 当前不少文学作品被改编成电影。有人选择看电影， 有人则喜欢读原著。请你以 “Film or book, which do you prefer?” 为题，按照下列要点写一篇英语短文： 1. 看电影：省时、有趣、易懂； 2. 读原著：细节更多、语言优美； 3. 我的看法及理由。 注意：1. 词数100左右，文章题目和开头已给出； 2. 参考词汇：original work或book in the original （原著）,主要点评： 抄袭阅读理解中的句子，不知所云，未能传达给读者任何信息，字数不够。,评分：0分,主要点评： 语言素质欠缺；基本功差； 语句毛病多；字母大小写、 标点符号、书写不清等等。,评分：10分,主要点评： 卷面不整洁；涂改较多； 语言错误多；内容不全； 层次不清等。,评分：15分,主要点评： 语言不够地道；中文式思维； 词汇错误较多；卷面不整洁， 涂改也较多。,评分：20分,主要点评： 语言表达流畅；层次分明； 但未能恰当地使用过渡词 语，文章连贯性不强。,评分：25分,主要点评： 语言准确、流畅，要点齐全，内容完整，层次清晰，结构紧凑，前后连贯。 能使用较多的语法结构和词汇，并能恰当地使用过渡词语。,评分：30分,如何让高考英语作文得高分？,近几年要求“使用较多语法结构和词汇”，因此要想得高分，除了要点和语言准确度以外，还必须在较复杂的句子结构或较高级的词汇上有所表现。 句式单一，缺乏生气的文章，哪怕无任何错误也不可能得高分，相反“有些错误，但是为了使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致”，给分档次仍在最高档(2125分)。,阅卷教师喜欢什么样的作文?,字体工整，卷面干净； 紧扣主题，条理清晰； 语言地道，过渡自然； 长度适中，一气呵成。,阅卷教师讨厌什么样的作文?,涂涂抹抹，斑斑点点； 层次不清，段落不分； 语句不通，杂乱无章； 书写潦草，卷面不洁；,句 子 的 结 构,活动一;判断句子的类型（并列句,简单句， 复合句） 1， She arrived quite early. 2，Thats exactly what I am planning to do. 3，Hurry up, or its getting late. 4，We love peace but we are not afraid of war. 5，She may have arrived now. 6，There is something wrong in what he said .,Step 4: 组织活动,（简单句）,（简单句）,（并列句）,（并列句）,（复合句）,（复合句）,1. 一句多译 2. 句型转换 3. 句子扩展 4. 修辞手段,运用多种方法，抓好句型表达训练,他们努力去完成这项任务。 1，They - to finish the work. (简单句) 2，They -to finish the work. (简单句） 3，They - to finish the work. (简单句) 4，They - to finish the work. (复合句) 5，They -to finish the work. (复合句),活动二，一句多译（1）一句多译,tried their best,did their best,attempted,did what they could,did everything /all they could,他太累了，不能继续前进。 1,He was- tired- walk any farther. (简单句) 2,He was - tired- he couldnt walk any farther. (复合句) 3,He was too tired, -he couldnt walk any farther. (并列句) 4,- he was too tired, he couldnt walk any farther. (复合句),一句多译（2）,too,to,so,that,so,Since,1由简单句扩展成并列句 Tom is our monitor now. He came to our school last year. Tom came to our school last year and he is our monitor now. (把意义松散的两个句子合为一体，句意连贯性更强了) Tom came to our school last year; he is our monitor now. (通过标点符号也能达到异曲同工之效),活动三： 句子扩展（1）,2由简单句扩展成复合句 例如：The meeting came to an end. 我们试加一个定语从句： 1, The meeting -came to an end. 我们试加一个状语从句： 2, -, the meeting came to an end. (When 引导的 时间状语从句） 3,The meeting came to an end .- (Though 引导的让步状语从句） 4 -, the meeting came to an end.(Before引导的时间状语从句）,句子扩展（2）,that they held in our classroom,When we arrived,though it was still early,Before I could speak anything,并列：and, as well as, also, bothand等； 选择：or, eitheror, neither.nor, otherwise 等； 原因：because, for, as, since, owing to, due to 等； 结果：so, therefore, thus, as a result 等；,运用连词或介词，提高文章的连贯性,时间：when, before, later, first, and then, next 等； 比较：on the contrary, for another thing 等 转折：but, yet, however, although, in spite of 等； 递进：besides, even, whats more, in addition等； 举例：for example, such as, like, namely 等 总结：in short, in general, in a word, to sum up等。,活动四， 加连接词 Tom saw a bird. The bird was wounded. He took the bird to the zoo. The workers in the zoo praised him. He arrived home late. He was happy. Tom saw a wounded bird，- he took it to the zoo. The workers in the zoo praised him. - he came home late, he was happy.,so,Though,Sept 5:习作评讲，质检一短文写作（满分25分） 请你根据你生活中的一个事例用英语写一篇短文，谈谈诚信（honesty)的作用。,Honesty means always talking the truth and never cheating .Honesty is a kind of courage and responsibility ,an invisible power and wealth.Honesty wins trust ,respect and friendship .So it pays to be honest . 注意：1，无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语； 2，内容必须结合你生活中的一个事例； 3，文中不得透漏个人姓名和学校姓名； 4，词数100左右,怎样写这篇文章呢？ 一，（1）内容要点；生活中的事例。 （2）题材； 叙述与 记事相结合。 （3）基本时态；一般现在时与一般过去时。 （4）重要人称；第一人称。 二，审题-列提纲-造句-连句成文-修改-抄写,评讲学生考试中的错句,1,We not believe you any longer . 2,Only you are honest can you make more friends. 3,Petch is my a friends whom I get along well with him . 4,Honesty is plays a important part in the world .,（改为：We didn't believe you any longer ),(改为：Only if /when you are honest can you make more friends .),(改为：Petch is my friend whom I get along well with .,(改为：Honesty is playing /plays /has played an important part in the world ),Possible version:,(1） Honesty is a good virtue.（2） If you are honest all the time ,you'll be trusted and respected by others.（3） I have learned a lot from my experience of dishonesty. （4) When I was in Senior One ,I was so eager to get a high score that I cheated in the exam .(5)Although nobody discovered it,I had sense of success at all.(6) Instead ,I felt guilty and it,(1)(2)句说明了诚实是好的美德，用了高级词汇virture 和if引导的条件状语从句；will be trusted and .将来时的被动语态。(3)句引出我的经历. (4)写了事件发生的时间和原因，用了时间状语从句和结果状语从句。 （ 5)(6)写了事件发生后的感受，用了让步状语从句，连接词instead和高级词 guilty 。,bothered me for a long time . (7)What was worse ,I was afraid that my friends would know about it and trust me no longer .(8)So from then on ,I have been determined never to be dishonest (9).Otherwise I will be looked down upon and lose all my friends. (10)As you can see from my experience,if you are honest , you can say and do what you like without fear ).（11）In conclusion ,to be honest will ensure you a happy life .,(7)句写到了作者更糟的心情，用了What was worse这个表递进的连接词组，突出了作者说谎给自己带来的烦恼和惩罚。 （8）和（9)写了作者决心不再说谎也即说谎会带来的后果，用了词组 from then on和 look down upon也即have been determined 现在完成时的被动语态和will be looked down upon 将来时的被动语态。 （10）和（11）句从经历中得出总结，用了as引导的定语从句，if 引导的条件状语从句,what 引导的宾语从句，用了)In conclusion 表总结的短语，,to be honest 动词不定时作主语等语法现象。,小结英语写作教学注意事项,1. 注意审清题目要求 2. 注意用合理的体裁、题材 3. 注意正确使用人称、时态和语态 4. 注意掌握中心要点，以防遗漏 5. 注意正确合理地使用词汇与句型，防止表达的单一性 6. 注意语言表达地道，防止汉式英语 7. 注意大小写、标点符号和单词拼写，防止发生低级错误 8. 注意文章的检查与修改，注意连贯，学会分段 9. 注意文章的卷面干净与整体布局，争取印象分,Step 6:,小结：三段式作文法 和十句作文法,1. 所谓三段式就是将一篇书面表达按三段的写作模式谋篇布局。 2. 就整体篇章结构而言，如何把握较大的写作空间，三段式的写作模式为最佳选择。,基本模式,1第一段开门见山，提出要解决的问题或观点，或者把时间、地点、人物和主要事件及时点出。 2第二段要摆出事实或提出论据，或者把事情发展的经过详细写出来。 3最后一段，得出结论或理由。,十句作文法,十句作文法是有关专家总结出来的一种高分作文方法，考生在经过短期训练之后便可较大幅度地提高写作水平。,写作分析,1. 这篇书面表达的中心思想是电视所带来的积极影响。 2. 电视对现代生活的影响是多方面的，考生不要试图面面俱到，如果涉及面太多，文章反而显得松散。我们只需选择几个方面进行写作，可用举例的方法合理安排语言材料。,基本模式,第一段为开头，包括两句。第一句为主题句，点明全文主题；第二句为扩展句，进一步说明和支持主题句。两者关系也可倒过来，由第一句说明情况，第二句点明主题。 第二段为正文，共七句。第三句为主题句，提出本段的主题，它应与第一段的主题相关或一致。第四至九句为扩展句，说明和支持本段的主题。句与句之间要注意好过渡，以使段落逻辑合理，结构得当。 第三段为结尾，简化为一句，也是全文的总结句（第十句），它将前面的内容总结为一个结果，表明自己的论点。,写作典例,电视在人们的日常生活中占有很重要的地位，电视传播不断深层次地影响着每一个人。请以“Television” 为题，写一篇有关其所带来的积极影响的英语短文。,欣赏习作,【范文】 Television Television presents a vivid world in front of us.1(主题句) Through TV, we can learn what is happening across the world. 2(扩展句) Television also plays an important educational role in our daily life.3(主题句) For one thing, the TV university provides an opportunity for people who can not go to formal university.4(扩展句) For another, children can broaden their scope of knowledge by watching popular programs.5(扩展句) Besides, women can learn about the latest fashion of dresses and the best recipe for making fruit cakes.6(扩展句) Furthermore, we can learn many world advanced technologies from TV programs.7(扩展句) And also we can learn singing, dancing and doing physical exercise in some special TV training courses.8(扩展句)In short, the effect of TVs educational role is becoming more and more obvious.9(扩展句) Having viewed these aspects, and with many more TV programs produced, I believe that our life will become even more significant. 10(总结句),From the picture, we can see that the young tree is supported by a stick while growing. However, once there is no support, the young tree is broken off. As the picture suggests, we teenagers grow up almost in the same way. We children need not only the necessary support and care from our parents and teachers but also the challenge of difficulty, the experience of hardships and the joy of success. As parents and teachers, they don't have to do everything for us, and too much care is not helpful. Just offer us the opportunity to develop our ability and we are sure to grow up well.,As we can see from the picture, two people, father and son, are talking to each other. The boy, standing on the ground, is looking up at his father, slightly scared, while his father, seated high on a big Chinese character “fu“, meaning “father“, is shouting to his son. Such a situation seems fairly common in our society. When talking to each other, father and son are not in equal positions. Fathers simply tell their sons what to do rather than listen patiently. Therefore, sons will have few chances to share their own ideas or open up,to their fathers. They often look up to their fathers with respect, fearing that they might not live up to fathers' expectations. I hope our parents will listen to us more instead of just giving us orders.,2013新课标卷英语（甘肃） 第二节 书面表达（满分25分）,假定你是李华，自制一些中国结（Chinese knot）。给开网店的美国朋友Tom写封信，请他代卖，要点包括： 1.外观（尺寸、颜色、材料） 2.象征意义 3.价格 注意：1.词数100左右； 2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3.开头语已为你写好。,参考范文：,Dear Tom, How are you?（greeings） I wonder if you could sell some Chinese knots for me. (destination) I made them myself with red silk threads, cloth and other materials. They look really beautiful in the shape of a diamond, about 5 inches long and 4 inches wide. In china, these knots stand for friendship, love and good luck. People can either give them as gifts to friends or hang them in their houses. They are only 12.99 US dollars each. If anyone wants to know more about the knots, let them write to me. Also, do let me know if you need further information. Thank you! (contact ways) Li hua.,